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Polar Bears


Author: Trifecta
ASL Info:    14.male.Somewhere
Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 32 /34 /28
Words: 244
Class/Type: Lyrics /Love
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Yeah. A love song, and such.


Polar Bears



Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway
Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway
Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway
Showing love so blindly...

Love and my torment are almost always together
But of course it can always lead to my happiness
Such an interesting hting, goes either way
Love could be happiness, love could be saddness
Love could mean any emotion there is
Any emotion out there

Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway, I dream of your arms around me
Two hearts hanging from blue strings from the doorway, right next to all these memories

Do you mind telling me if you were ever interested?
Would you mind showing me what I actually meant?
Could you please tell me whatever happened that made you look over me?

Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway
Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway
Two hearts, two hearts, two hearts, two hearts...

I'm searching love
If people are meant to come in pairs
Why not us?

This unrequited love...
It's breaking me...
This unrequited love...
It broke me...

Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway
Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway
Two hearts...
Hanging...

Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway
Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway
Would you like to take a gamble?




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  Along with everyone else, this line confuses me
"two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway"
I'm sure it means something to you, but we don't get it.

I like the line "If people come in pairs; Why not us?"

It's a tad repetitive.. try using some different words (ex: instead of 'love', try 'admiration' or something related).

I love the title though, and I don't know why.
| Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked these lyrics. The repetition can work well or horribly (I'd have to listen to the music put these lyrics but... that aside I'll continue)

The line that seems to be getting debated on a little bit in the other comments is:

"Two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway"

This line is completely up for interpretation which I find is much more important in lyrics than in conventional poetry. I agree with dax in the interpretation of the blue strings... possibly a little more than just simply sadness... but I'm not sure. The doorway symbolizes leaving? A door to depart from the relationship and everything ends. Anyway, after all that... I like the line!

One suggestion:

"Two hearts, two hearts, two hearts, two hearts..."

I would find this more powerful if each "Two hearts" was seperated by periods rather than commas. With the ... still intact at the end. It just solidifies the words a little more, empowering them more and singling them out a little more... I don't know, maybe just another preference of mine.

Nicely done.

~ Aj
| Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by The Seraphim | [ Reply to This ]
  i dont quite get the

"two hearts hanging from blue strings in the doorway"

what are they hanging in the doorway for and what are these blue strings you are talking about
is this supposed to be some kind of metaphor for something else. maybe something deeper?? i dont get it.

and in the sixth verse i guess you could say when you say

"I'm searching love
If people are meant to come in pairs
Why not us?"

do you mean to say i am searching for love? because i dont think i am searching love makes a whole lot of sense here.

how right you are when you say love can really be any emotion. or maybe we are mistaking these emotions for love perhaps? hmmm something to think about.

anyways i think this has potential. but over all i think it was too dry maybe. it doesnt seem like you put enough emotion in it. you basically just spelled everything out plain as day. maybe put a little more description into this, a little more feeling. tell what you love about this person. or what your torment is that you said always comes with your love. elaborate a little more into everything you talk about instead of just taking the surface of everything. it will make it deeper and probably easier to understand the overall message

but good start!
thanks for sharing!
| Posted on 2006-03-03 00:00:00 | by vintagepepper | [ Reply to This ]
  to my i think of the blue strings as being sadness for blue is blue.

polar bears? is that because the love is cold?

maybe if one had mental disorders they could call it bi-polar bears lol i'm the cynical one

i think i understand it

two people fell in love, things got a little awkward most likely due to nervousness and things fell apart and you would like to know what started it all and how it got to the point of you two seperating and breaking hearts

been there done it...it sucks having something that could have been so much more but due to lack of communication or something else it breaks up like a ship amidst rock pounded by a storm.

dax
| Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by dax | [ Reply to This ]


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