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Author: luvy
ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270 /168 /35
Words: 139
Class/Type: Misc /Depressed
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I feel like a rat

ensnared in a circular maze that ive ran a million times over

i reiterate the sam e borin cycle ove and over again

The dullness of it all is killing me on the inside

I look in the mirror and all i see is a shell

There used to be a light tht radiated from my body

That light is being compressed into a tiny ball
and is sinking into the darkest part of me

Everytime i try to escape invisible hands reach out enclose me in dispair and pull me back to the world i hate

I walk everyday and end up nowhere

I look around never truly seeing

Welcome youve just ahd a look into my hollow empty being

Submitted on 2006-03-04 01:07:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  damn...akaila's an idiot. i didn't really like this one. i don't know some depressing poetry is good but urs really didn't stand out to me as one of those. i did really like this line though:

i reiterate the sam e borin cycle ove and over again
| Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  This write is terrific
You are sharing with your fellow youth
that they are not the only ones that feel trapprd where they are now with no escape in sight
Knowledge is the secret my friend
Rad and listen intently to others
What we hear stays in our subconcious forever
God Bless
Your Friend
| Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice. Everything said here made me stop and think about the way I'm living. Wonderful job of getting your point through with a venom glaze bullet. I'd give your write 8.5 out of 10. Spread your words like fire.

Sincerely yours with a bloody kiss,
| Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ]
  Complex thinking going on here. It looks like you need a change in scenary or how you view things. This was very easy for me to relate to. I hope you get past this empty feeling and heal very soon.

| Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  HEY GENA! I LOVE U! ok i think u should take out " I feel like a rat" cuz it just doesnt sound write! that line made me feel like eatin cheese! but the rest of it was good and reminded me of something that i would write! i love u! and i want u to be happy! so dont hide in no shell iight! or imma have to break it! somehow! hehe! i love u!
" dont ever be afraid to come to me and cry.
Dont ever be afraid to look me in da eye! dont ever be afraid to tell me how u feel cuz ur my gurl and we gotta keep it REAL!"
| Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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