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    dots Submission Name: Flickering Fantasydots
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    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 844
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1022



    Description:
       was deeply inspired by losing_focus's works. this just kinda spilled out after i read some of her stuff.


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    dotsFlickering Fantasydots
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    Has come and gone, 1984
    Big Brother came but nobody saw
    Its 8:00 PM all the bees are home
    Queen bee is feeding from her mighty throne
    Zombied bees come marching in
    Tired of the world that they live in
    A flickering fantasy this queen bee
    Emanates hope for the worker bee
    So godly, so good, so honest and kind
    Worker bees offer their sacrificed minds
    Queen bee smiles, and grins, and laughs
    And steps low and joins the workers in dance
    Clap, clap, clap and dance
    All the fools all over the land
    The hurt, the low, the lost are beckoned
    And trained to 24 frames a second
    Millions and millions are cheerfully joining
    The entranced dance is constantly growing
    Pain is pasted with electric smiles
    Reality lost in sacrificed minds
    Dawn fades in. It’s another day,
    Enthused worker bees are away
    Free to roam with minds in prison
    They’ll come back to Television.




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