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    dots Submission Name: A Distinctive Someonedots
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    Author: ParLon
    ASL Info:    19/f
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 68/98/50
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 193
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1006



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       It's just what I feel now.


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    dotsA Distinctive Someonedots
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    I noticed you the first instance you walked into C. First I thought I knew you, but I realised that it was a thought, just because I liked you in the first place. The fact that you were absolutely my type, made me pretend that I was whispering something to my friend, in order to see you better and do nothing but make sure I like you. You glanced several times at me, Do you like me? I wish it is so, so much! And then, I left, and you stayed. You stayed with the friend you were with. The very close friend you were with. Am I losing my chances in advance?
    And then the next day. I came in C. again. I was with the same friend. And from him I found out that your friends were sitting on the next table. And then you came. And you made foul attempts to look at me without me noticing. But I did. Why do I have the feeling, or the memory, I daresay, that you paid more attention to me than anyone else does when they see a random being pass by or in their presence? Should I not lose hope?




    Submitted on 2006-03-04 06:46:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well i'm not too sure what it was about other than someone you saw that you were attracted too. it is very unclear, and cluttered
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      

    the line
    losing my chance in advance
    kid of confuses me. at first i thought you ment to advance. go further w/e.

    but then i though about it and in advance works too. like losing your chances before you get a chance to use them..

    and also i love this line....Why do I have the feeling, or the memory, I daresay, that you paid more attention to me than anyone else does when they see a random being pass by or in their presence?

    i love how it's so long, though i'm sure you hear that enough big boy now don't you. hmmm.yeah. jk. i do like how it's lengthy, and it's so specific and it sounds cool like i imagine it read out.

    all in all i quite enjoyed it. it makes me think of just scribbling away lookng at that unknowing someone special. the heart of longing

    nice

    ryan
    | Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]



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