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    dots Submission Name: Our society (haiku)dots
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    Author: Duke Medhat
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    5.08 - 58/38/24
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Haiku/Depressed
    Total Views: 871
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 83



    Description:
       It is about the free secularists in Egypt

    "Leave": mean emigrate to any country that believe in freedom

    "melt": still as you secularist in theocratic society

    "burn": convert in to a religionist zombie (theocrat)

    "die": commit suicide


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    dotsOur society (haiku)dots
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    We are in big hell
    There is no future for us
    Leave, melt, burn or die




    Submitted on 2006-03-04 09:15:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Dear Duke;
    You worded this poem very well, and there is nothing that I would dare change in it. You clearly have a strong belief in your topic, and know the exact words to convey your meaning, nice job. Keep up with the Haikus, and writing in general. Very good job.
    ~~Mykquillion
    | Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by Mykquillion | [ Reply to This ]
      cute, it was kinda funny, only because you had datailed definitions of what the four last words meant in your Haiku. hehe...but it was the best Haiku i've ever read...

    -SavedDragon
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      im not in to hiku and im not sure what this is for..it shows how u feel pretty well but what doest the the us? is that us as in humans in genral...or like hell being the earth..its pretty cool but are hikue sappost to ryme..? idk im stupid..
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]


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