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The hours tick as i sit and stare Im a man of promise but i rest nowhere boredome hits and strikes my bones why dont you leave me be, just leave me alone i strech my tongue with paper and pen as the hours keep ticking again and again the cylinder swings on the clock back and forth teasing my being teasing my soul Time wants me to write, time wants me to play like a bird who pecks on wood all of the day lift me from this old tired song let my voice sing all the quarter notes wrong I guess im stuck till i hit my niche which is writing or playing tell me which is which for me playing is writing and to write is to play i hope thats where my being will rest without delay soft and comforting is the creative processes i do the hours tick slower and break away from the leu my sitting and starring had ceased in its tracks the longer i compose the more i sit back |
It was a rather nice poem, flowing and able to keep the attention. I enjoyed it. However, there are a few typos (mis-spellings and lack of commas). But I am not going to sit here and point them out as they may have been intentional for all I know. Great work, keep it up! | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Jodans | [ Reply to This ] | i loved it..the flow was great, it sorta drew me in..the content of this poem was really good..but i liked most was your wording and rhyme, its was like WOW, it kept me entertained and made me want to read more..so awsome piece!..keep up the good work! | ![]() -Lucy- | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ] | |