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The Hours


Author: Fraser
ASL Info:    26
Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 30 /55 /35
Words: 184
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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i was just thinking how time has an affect on you. When someone isnt doing much it can really get you down


The Hours



The hours tick as i sit and stare
Im a man of promise but i rest nowhere
boredome hits and strikes my bones
why dont you leave me be, just leave me alone

i strech my tongue with paper and pen
as the hours keep ticking again and again
the cylinder swings on the clock back and forth
teasing my being teasing my soul

Time wants me to write, time wants me to play
like a bird who pecks on wood all of the day
lift me from this old tired song
let my voice sing all the quarter notes wrong

I guess im stuck till i hit my niche
which is writing or playing tell me which is which
for me playing is writing and to write is to play
i hope thats where my being will rest without delay

soft and comforting is the creative processes i do
the hours tick slower and break away from the leu
my sitting and starring had ceased in its tracks
the longer i compose the more i sit back




Submitted on 2006-03-04 10:00:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It was a rather nice poem, flowing and able to keep the attention. I enjoyed it.
However, there are a few typos (mis-spellings and lack of commas).
But I am not going to sit here and point them out as they may have been intentional for all I know.
Great work, keep it up!
| Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Jodans | [ Reply to This ]
  i loved it..the flow was great, it sorta drew me in..the content of this poem was really good..but i liked most was your wording and rhyme, its was like WOW, it kept me entertained and made me want to read more..so awsome piece!..keep up the good work!
-Lucy-
| Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]


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