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    dots Submission Name: Reciprocationdots

    Author: Daokao
    Elite Ratio:    6.4 - 67/37/10
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    With life’s first breath of air,
    fragile beings are we;
    for every two steps forward,
    we trip and fall back three.

    If only we would understand,
    a law at our right-hand;
    it goes by the name of reciprocate,
    based on give instead of take.

    This canon reverts to the beginning,
    an axiomatic taught by all faiths;
    which states to give value to others,
    expecting no return in its place.

    Reciprocation is an epiphany universal,
    an experience that touches the heart;
    when offered a true hand of kindness
    response with rife gratitude as an art.

    Seize this fundamental truth my friend,
    when put into action you will find;
    life’s little setbacks will disappear,
    replaced by prolific treasures of kind.

    Submitted on 2006-03-04 13:07:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      And I can learn from you I am sure. But didn't the frog make three leaps up the wall of the well and fell back two?

    This is a very nice piece, teaching something serious and important through poetry.

    does your wife write too?

    | Posted on 2006-04-11 00:00:00 | by D McDaniel | [ Reply to This ]
      I would say that this poem contains some truth. But I am a very strong supporter of "Humanity will lead to its own destruction". So... nah! :)

    Also, you "glued" here the idea of partnership and friendship. The language is of high quality (wish I had that) and I can't find any mistakes. It happens rarely but you wrote something above (much above) the site's average. I hope I will see some more of your work in the future.

    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by WriterX | [ Reply to This ]

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