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    dots Submission Name: Never Childdots
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    Author: Scarlett Rose
    ASL Info:    16
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 13/8/9
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 700
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    Bytes: 206



    Description:
       I wrote this a while ago while i was feeling depressed and all that jazz.


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    dotsNever Childdots
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    What never is, never was.
    The never child
    using never knives.
    The never knives make the blood shine red.
    Then the never child disappears.
    Because what never is, never was.




    Submitted on 2006-03-04 13:14:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this! The imagery was amazing...and ur word choice was excellent! The way u used repition in the first and last line gave the poem the mystery and made for a really good ending. It realy callobrated well with the poem.
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      what is the poem about?
    a child who is never noticed
    commits sucide or dies and it as if the
    child never existed?
    Because what never is, never was
    kinda of stating the obvious isnt?
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Bloomsbury Set | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it..it was a bit confusing, then again i'm not all here today..is this about an ignored child killing him-herself, so then they never existed because they never were, or i don't know..i can't explain it but i get what your saying..keep up the good work !
    -Lucy-
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]


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