A feeling
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idk really it was random.
A feeling
It's torture to my brain torture to my mind like when my parents whup my ass torture to my behind starts in the pits of my stomach works it's way up tearing out my insides kinda like bad luck like when i use to have nightmares before i use to dream it goes through my eyes makes me wanna scream what use to be so abstract now seems really clear A feeling that was so prolonged now is really near |
Submitted on 2006-03-04 16:41:03 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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this one was ok. so random. is it a good feelign or a bad feeling? ur pretty vague about this one. i liked the first stanza the most. i could just relate cuz i used to always get my ass beat. lol| | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ] | At first when I read this poem I didn't really like it, but then as I continued to read, I found that I truly loved it. It seems to express things bluntly that people only want to hint at. Sounds like a song...if you play an instrutment, i would consider putting a tune to it. | | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Scarlett Rose | [ Reply to This ] | this is a good piece..honest, blunt..serious manner..the first stanzas though don't go with the poem all that well..they just just have a different feel to them and different emotion set...any parent that abuses their kid is such a [censored].(pardon my language)..srry if your parents do that to you, my heart goes out to you honestly...anyhows i loved it..keep up the great work! | | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ] | I liked the poem but it was mediocre...the first stanza didn't really go with the rest of the poem.The ending was well written with | A feeling that was so prolonged Now is really near maybe lose the "so" before prolonged and exchange the" is really near"with really is near, just to help the flow a little more. | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by Jill Lynne | [ Reply to This ] | |
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