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    Author: sickly
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545/537/203
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1113
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 605



    Description:
       this is something that i wrote starting yesterday and finished today.if anyone reads and comments on this, i wrote and posted something yesterday, "a wanted man", that no one commented on and i really think that you should give it a read.anyway, i'll get back to you all very soon.


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    i forced myself into history
    sorry to have taken so long
    it must have been a bitch while i was gone
    so come on and love it all
    i sure know something
    this is what's been prayed for
    i'm a product of evolution
    a risen son
    a golden rose
    a dropping tear
    i loved you good
    but you loved me not
    graceless and fading
    a wild horse
    a secret from satan
    somebody's crazy dream
    for a one and only crazy night
    borne upon the wind
    going on 'til never
    into the darkness




    Submitted on 2006-03-04 21:46:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thats kinda...idk...its great but a lil random...like the rymes u used were pretty good but i think like half way through u just kinda stoped ryming all together..what happend?
    | Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
      I dont think you have to rhyme all the way thru for it to be good. This WAS good. I love the line
    a wild horse
    a secret from satan
    That is pretty. Keep up the good work, you've got skills
    | Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by I_m not Broken | [ Reply to This ]


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