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Author: sickly
Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545 /537 /203
Words: 92
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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this is something that i wrote starting yesterday and finished today.if anyone reads and comments on this, i wrote and posted something yesterday, "a wanted man", that no one commented on and i really think that you should give it a read.anyway, i'll get back to you all very soon.


i forced myself into history
sorry to have taken so long
it must have been a bitch while i was gone
so come on and love it all
i sure know something
this is what's been prayed for
i'm a product of evolution
a risen son
a golden rose
a dropping tear
i loved you good
but you loved me not
graceless and fading
a wild horse
a secret from satan
somebody's crazy dream
for a one and only crazy night
borne upon the wind
going on 'til never
into the darkness

Submitted on 2006-03-04 21:46:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  thats kinda...idk...its great but a lil the rymes u used were pretty good but i think like half way through u just kinda stoped ryming all together..what happend?
| Posted on 2006-03-04 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
  I dont think you have to rhyme all the way thru for it to be good. This WAS good. I love the line
a wild horse
a secret from satan
That is pretty. Keep up the good work, you've got skills
| Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by I_m not Broken | [ Reply to This ]

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