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The Good News


Author: Trifecta
ASL Info:    14.male.Somewhere
Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 32 /34 /28
Words: 170
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
Total Views: 947
Average Vote:    5.0000
Bytes: 1144



Description:


It's like... one of those cocky, headstrong "I'm better than you, asshole" songs.


The Good News



Nothing knocks me over
Nothing knocks me over
Try as hard as you want
But nothing knocks me over

I'm never gonna die
I'll always be immortal
I'm never gonna fade
I'll never go away
I will never die
You will never
No
Yiou will never
GET THE BEST OF ME!

Nothing knocks me over
Nothing knocks me over
Try as hard as you want
But nothing knocks me over

Try as hard as you want
You will never win
You will never
Oh, you will never
You will never win
I will never lose
I will never
I will never
I will never lose!

Nothing knocks me over
Nothing knocks me over
Try as hard as you want
But nothing knocks me over

Nothing knocks me over
Nothing knocks me over
Try as hard as you want
But nothing knocks me over

Nothing knocks me over
Nothing knocks me over
Try as hard as you want
But nothing knocks me over

Go.




Submitted on 2006-03-04 23:59:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Interesting. Definately sounds like something I would write. It shows you have a lot of confidence, that's a good thing. This is one of those pieces that just gets you in the mood for kicking some serious ass, but that's not a bad thing. It gets kind of repetitive, and the words are pretty basic, but if you truely want it that way, feel free to leave it.
| Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]
  Tri, I thought it was interesting that since you posted the "Bad News" and the "Good News", all of the views had gone to the "Bad News". So I thought I would take a look at the "Good News" first. Lyrics do have a great amount of repeating but I think you over do it a bit. I think I would get pretty board about the third of fourth nothing knocks me over verse. Same verse - five times? What do I know...reminds me of an old song called "Wild Thing" which was a big hit way way back.
| Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by Daokao | [ Reply to This ]
  well i read both Good News and Bad News, and one thing i noticed about both, is that you use the word 'I' way too much. maybe when you're in the phase of all the I's, make it every other line instead of every line.

i dont think that your repitition is over the top...maybe borderline, but at the same time, songs are like that. it's called the chorus. but for the readers sake, so they dont feel bogged down with the same lines, like at the end of this one, where you repeat it 3 times in a row, write it once, then just write ( chorus ) ( chorus )...see what i'm saying?
| Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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