When Your In Love

Author: Hip-Hop Honey ASL Info:    16/f/canada Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31 Words: 115

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When Your In Love

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I gave my heart to you And you gave me yours too But the day I found out That you were her's It tore My heart is no longer whole Why did I leap So fucking far Wait I know It was because I knew You were there by my side To take this suicidal dive But now we have Other people to please You have her He has me But I guess that's What you do When your madly in love You have to cause Pain and tears to The one you love Basically what I'm trying To imply is that You do stupid shit When your in love

Submitted on 2006-03-05 01:18:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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It didn't flow all the way through but i get what your saying. It was something that some people can relate to and others feel that they can relate to but can't because what the are going through and what was said in this are two different things. If that made sense lol. Anyways good job. D

| Posted on 2006-08-28 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]

This was good I'm glad it was over 100 words at least the flow of the poem kinda went haywire at the end but it had a really good point and idea and I loved the phrase "Cause you are there by myside to take that suicidal dive" that's what I mean by using more descriptive words in your poems it adds this very emotional poetic wuality to them keep it up and try to once agian get a little more into the poem an averge of 150 words per poem is good but this was a good poem =Logan=

| Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]

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