Description: the people pleaser, the approval addict, the rejection fearer, the broken homed, the needlessly guilty, the loser, the reject has a story too.
The Faker's Plight -------------------------------------------
Darkness and its shadow
Trapped inside his mind
An endless loop of code
The shrink needs a shrink
Needs a shrink needs a shrink
He’s shrunk under the weight
The cross only a feather
Lost inside himself
The dubbed screams only an outlet
Into an outlet into an outlet
The echo has even faded
The fugitive is hiding
He doesn’t know where
Guilty of himself from the running
And running and running
Down his cheeks
These molten drops of nothing
Falling through the air
Dripping and dripping
Into an ocean of despair
i like how u used the word his and he to discribe the story and meaning i loved the part about dripping in to dispare that made me think of when i was really depressed and how i felt it loved this peice and it made me feel really sad but i loved it anyway
i liked the flow of the words. and when u used the same words at the end of each verse-that was cool lol:) im a crap commenter i dont know what else 2 say 0_o check out my stuff eh? see ya elva
Seems to me that your subject is in a constant spiral of despair. one thing causes another and another and another and it just keep spiraling and spiiraling into the chaos that is himself. I dig this. especially the last stanza its almost like the guys imploding. peace john
Submission Name: The Faker's Plight
