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    dots Submission Name: Rememberancedots
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    Author: annezah
    ASL Info:    19/f/long island NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.5 - 14/15/16
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 940
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1320



    Description:
       well it went out to a love that was sent away to iraq now who is long gone. im not looking for praise i dont mind if you have negative feelings about it i just want to see what other people feel/think. thank you


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    dotsRememberancedots
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    Words, will never be able to describe the way I feel for you
    Time, is the only thing that brings us further
    Distance, is the only thing that keeps us apart
    I, am the only one that will love you the way I do
    Love, isn't even enough to say what I have with you
    Hope, holding onto what we've started
    Your eyes, are the only thing that keep me awake
    Your touch, will never be like any other
    Your words, have left me speechless in your surroundings
    Your love, is one in a lifetime that I will never replace
    Your embrace, is one I never want to leave
    Your lips, will never feel the same on another persons
    Your hands, fit perfectly into mine as if a glove
    Years, will overpower and never be forgotten
    Tears, will soak into your shoulder for you are my relying source
    Smiles, always appear when I am with you that never fade
    The voices, of your chrous I will never be able to forget
    The memories, of my perfect love will never leave me emptiedhearted
    Your tone, sends me into heaven upon an instant
    Your laughter, only makes me laugh much harder
    When I'm with you I never ever want this to end
    And you my dear, are my one and only and that shall never change




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      wow
    thats allot of love
    that is really sad at the same time
    i'm sry about what happened to your loved one
    gsh... i wish i knew what to say...

    kay
    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
      There are many greatly felt emotions listed in your write. That is a good thing. There is one thing that I think you should try doing now. Having all of these emotins and thoughts written in the "list" manner, you should try stringing them together, in a manner in which there is no repitition and have complete flow.

    It then I think will wrap around the reader as they read it. sort of like a snake wrapping themselves around something.


    Keep writing.

    <brax
    | Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very nice poem I think you definetly hit the emotional nail on the head. As I was reading this poem I found myself thinking back to some of the loves in my life that are no longer there.

    -Kapone-
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by Kapone | [ Reply to This ]


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