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    dots Submission Name: unformed get formeddots
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    Author: DAlin
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 82/137/75
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 746
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 299



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    dotsunformed get formeddots
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    I touched the face of horror
    Into a woman eyes,
    With thoughts so deep and shallow
    Her heart had no fixed size.

    Shadows falling, shadows glow
    Deep above I was so low
    Like no other, she felt warmth
    When they watched unformed get formed.




    Submitted on 2006-03-05 09:45:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, i actually realize why one of your works became a favorite. i like this one too, and your talented. you create what i like to read.
    thanx for sharing,

    j
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by ParLon | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this.
    How have you been? Busy I am sure, as usual.

    THis was really well done though,
    you have your usual 'fog' to keep us wondering until we have read it a few times.
    Great depth here,
    thank you for the great write.
    take care
    much love
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this one because you have to read it twice to get the meaning... great job but you should have went into little more detail, but overall, great...
    | Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by _bloody_kiss_ | [ Reply to This ]


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