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    dots Submission Name: world soaked in sollitudedots
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    Author: elva
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 21/19/9
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 132
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       em ok i admit this is a very crapy poem,


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    dotsworld soaked in sollitudedots
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    this world i live in,all jewls and luxioriouse metaphores,
    it encourages , tells me im loved, im wanted
    feeding on my confusion .......

    im lost in this world,
    this world of ellusion,
    of endless rich halls,mirrors and ballads of courage,
    how i yern truth, like soothing rain in this scorching desert............

    i cannot go on ,
    this life is too smothered in death,
    and your name is too soaked in the blood of the inocent,
    i cannot walk this path you have set for me,
    i cannot sit at your side, on your throne of black lies,
    i cannot be your queen..............




    Submitted on 2006-03-05 13:05:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i loved your word choice and lines like "how i yern truth, like soothing rain in this scorching desert" the imagery was great but i did not understand what exactly the poem ws about... could u explan O.o lol but other then that it was cool
    | Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by lost.within.you | [ Reply to This ]
      i didnt really get what it was about...but thats just me..i liked the words like inocent and black lies i didnt really get the very ending as well? Why would u be my queen? hmm any way i though it was pretty neet..


    Trevor...~
    | Posted on 2006-03-05 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]



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