I always thought that a haiku had the 5-7-5 syllable format. However, this is a great job. Also, this piece falls more under the senryu format. Because it deals with human elements. Anyway, who am I? Nice job.
i dont get the middle line "love sang fondle-y" what does this mean mmmmm really dont kno about this one but i guess hey this yours and i dont mean to dis you i just dont get the middle part short simple and i guess cool ;)