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    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I look at whats going on in the world
    and i feel bad for complaing just cause im bored

    When it starts to rain and the wind slices through your bones like a thousand razor sharp knives

    I have a place oto go where i know ill be warm and survive

    When pangs of hunger naw at my belly

    I know all i have to do is ask and a hot meal can be prepared and ready.

    The sad thing is this more than i can say for some kids

    Sifting through land fills digging through garbage cans and sleeping in the lids

    But somehow some of these kids survive day by day

    To survive in a place where everything is working against you takes strength i can only imagine




    Submitted on 2006-03-05 20:37:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When pangs of hunger naw at my belly

    I know all i have to do is ask and a hot meal can be prepared and ready.

    To survive in a place where everything is working against you takes strength i can only imagine

    i think it takes a very grown person to admit that they have it easy. cuz most of the time all teenagers do is [censored]a and moan about how bad they have it when their lives are almost picture perfect. u recognize this as well and i think that's great. good job babe.
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      hey gena im bak again! hehe! did ya miss me? ok i feel like this is not finished! explain more about wat ur feelin about the world hunger! and work on the flow just a tid bit other than that i like it! bye gena! I LOVE UUUUU!

    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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