fifty dollar fiend

Author: sickly Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545 /537 /203 Words: 103

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fifty dollar fiend

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previous criminal virgin just like that guy a big category surgery and chemistry i'm out too smart for ugly people i speak at last of my hurt i brought a jury to it's knees i killed a man he really wanted to die that way he had it coming he knew it so did i beautiful i'm right about that again that's what i told you know your life that's heavy you don't want to ever know closed eyes forever are you still happy? tell me i really want to know who popped your cherry? will you buy me a drink?

Submitted on 2006-03-05 21:08:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This one is pretty good You worded this well and I think I do understand were you are coming from with this I like how you didnt get to graphic to describe your point This is done very well Nice Job!! God Bless Ron Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron

| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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