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    dots Submission Name: fifty dollar fienddots
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    Author: sickly
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545/537/203
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 905
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    Bytes: 707



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    dotsfifty dollar fienddots
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    previous criminal virgin
    just like that guy
    a big category
    surgery and chemistry
    i'm out
    too smart for ugly people
    i speak at last of my hurt
    i brought a jury to it's knees
    i killed a man
    he really wanted to die that way
    he had it coming
    he knew it
    so did i
    beautiful
    i'm right about that
    again
    that's what i told you
    know your life
    that's heavy
    you don't want to ever know
    closed eyes forever
    are you still happy?
    tell me
    i really want to know
    who popped your cherry?
    will you buy me a drink?




    Submitted on 2006-03-05 21:08:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This one is pretty good
    You worded this well and I think I do understand were you are coming from with this
    I like how you didnt get to graphic to describe your point
    This is done very well
    Nice Job!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
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    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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