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fifty dollar fiend

Author: sickly
Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545 /537 /203
Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /Gothic
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as if anyone here could give this a thought or two and comment.

fifty dollar fiend

previous criminal virgin
just like that guy
a big category
surgery and chemistry
i'm out
too smart for ugly people
i speak at last of my hurt
i brought a jury to it's knees
i killed a man
he really wanted to die that way
he had it coming
he knew it
so did i
i'm right about that
that's what i told you
know your life
that's heavy
you don't want to ever know
closed eyes forever
are you still happy?
tell me
i really want to know
who popped your cherry?
will you buy me a drink?

Submitted on 2006-03-05 21:08:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This one is pretty good
You worded this well and I think I do understand were you are coming from with this
I like how you didnt get to graphic to describe your point
This is done very well
Nice Job!!
God Bless

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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