Description: this girl needs to understand that i just left Ms. Bullshit. I don't want to be with another load of BS. If she can't make time for me at all, or be anywhere near on time (15 min. is one thing, 2 hours every time is another) then she's a waste of time and emotion. i made plans with her a week in advance, and everything was great until last minute, when there was a magical 2 hour hold up. fuck that shit.
If you gave a shit -------------------------------------------
If you gave a shit
You would be on time
You would be waiting
you would make time
If you really cared
I wouldn't be waiting
I wouldn't be worried
I wouldn't be tired
If you gave a shit
You would know what's happening
You would realize the problem
You would resolve the problem
If you really cared
I would be more understanding
I would be a little lienient
I would be content
But as it stands
You are never on time
I wait for hours on end
You sometimes don't show
So it stands here
I give you one last chance
You either make time on time or
I walk the fuck away and don't look back
PS: there is no just friends here. done is fucking done.
To be honest, I don't think it's crappie, cuz I know I'm not the best at raw, flat out poetry, but to each their own. I personally like poems builded on rhymes more, I find it hard for me to move above this, and still feel it sounds good. This is something I see your good at. And if you do change it, keep the original. LoVeIt! SingleRose:)
Oh, my God. This made me laugh. I loved the description you gave before the poem. As poetry it's not stellar. The way you just put it out there made me howl. Great raw emotion. My favorite is the line, "done is f-ing done." Bravo, my favorite crappy poem of the day.
Submission Name: If you gave a shit
