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    dots Submission Name: A horrible dreamdots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       The first ever poem written in my life. This poem written during my 8th class was not so famous but the teacher did say that it was good and thats all that i needed.


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    dotsA horrible dreamdots
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    I had a dream, which I can never forget.
    Even now I remember yet.
    The king size bird ripping my liver and I couldn't say a word.
    I fought with it,
    I tried to kill it,
    But I didn't have any wit.
    I got up I was alive I seem,
    Oh! What a horrible dream.




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      well at least your despiction has improved since this if it was so horrible wheres the horror behind it you you got to express yourself more and move on past your dream of a girl that doesnt exist. its good that you have your muse but your too obsess get out of your head and see the world around you. you live up to my qoute way too well. "Dreams are reality and reality is just a f***ed up nightmare
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by chaos_flame | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty straightforward and to the point. Rhythm, rhyme and flow in tune. All in all a good piece.

    And indeed a horrible dream, never had one of such caliber but from what you have written I have experienced dreams of more or less terror.

    Keep up the good work and have a good day.
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]


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