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    dots Submission Name: Lonely Nightdots
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    Author: faln_angl
    ASL Info:    25/f/MN
    Elite Ratio:    4.66 - 99/96/17
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
    Total Views: 168
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    Description:
       Something I scribbled last night in my dreamy moments of midnight insmonia.


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    dotsLonely Nightdots
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    I lay awake beneath the dark blanket
    of a black sky.
    As the trees shrug off the melting snow,
    fog blurs the lights in the parking lot.
    I try to trace one of the many sets
    of empty footprints
    left by people fleeing the chilly night.

    Television muted and windows open.
    I invite the crisp winter air,
    and the droning sound of a single engine plane,
    into my quiet realm of restlessness.

    A train whistles in the distance.
    But that's not the only thing
    prevenenting sleep from carrying me
    to the warmth of my dreams.

    My eyelids open,
    lifting the weight of my day
    as they beg for one more glance.
    I gaze across the southern horizon,
    helplessly enamored.
    Even in the cloudy sky,
    I can see your stars...and I smile.




    Submitted on 2006-03-06 10:34:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have had many nights like this as well. Outside thinking and dreaming of sleep. Or inside on my bed lieing awake and thinking of a loved one, a girlfriend lost, or a family member. I liked this poem mainly because I can relate to it. But the secondary reason is because I could visualize this poem. I believe the most part I liked was:

    "I try to trace one of the many sets
    of empty footprints
    left by people fleeing the chilly night"

    That was a very cool visualize for me for some reason. Anyway, good write friend, take care.

    Respect.
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by irish storm | [ Reply to This ]
      Hot damn! This was...amazing. Definitely going to my favorites list. I could perfectly imagine the atmosphere, the setting, and everything else from the imagery you so beautifully weaved through your words. I really liked the last stanza. Last night I think that I suffered the same bout of midnight insomnia as you. I couldn't get to sleep for the life of me.

    ~Corey
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Ravenwood | [ Reply to This ]



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