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    dots Submission Name: Mothers Little Miraclesdots

    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMothers Little Miraclesdots

    A seed in germination.
    Upheavals through epidermals of protection
    and channels towards a joyous sun.

    Uncurling like a fresh fern leaf,
    a coiled spring unwinds its' potential,
    worms it's way, snake-like and slithering,
    up through layers of dissipated dust and dirt
    and seeks a breakthrough.

    Rooted and firmly grounded
    Quenching on unconscious streams,
    a foundation of unseen connections
    form a network of strength
    from which to grow.

    Bathed in the light of a fathomless Father
    a photosynthesis of transforming splendor
    fires a passion flower torpedo into existence.
    Vying victoriously, vibrant and vivacious
    creatively curious,
    She raises her glorious head, again.

    Mother is full of little miracles to reflect upon.

    Submitted on 2006-03-06 11:01:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is truely an awesome write and very deep, and I to also love the respect that you show for her, Mothers are very specail people and you have shown just how special they can be. This is the one that really caught my attention this is my favorite part.

    Rooted and firmly grounded
    Quenching on unconscious streams,
    a foundation of unseen connections
    form a network of strength
    from which to grow.

    You are a great writer and keep up the great writing.

    | Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem! I'm a biology major, so it makes me happy to see science and art put together.

    Your imagery is amazingly powerful, and beautifully ambiguous. I love it when the writer leaves it up to the reader to decide what's going on. I especially like the imagery of the Father in the last stanza.

    I think that the only thing that I would change is I would put again in "...her glorious head, again." on the next line down. Other than that, this poem was great!

    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by littleshuford | [ Reply to This ]
      This my Friend is one outstanding write
    You took us your readers thru a trip down memory lane and left us happy to be alive with the memories of Loving Parents
    I was raised by my Mother so I really liked how you showed your respect and Love for her
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I wasn't to sure if you were speaking of a real plant or if you were refering to motherhood and pregnancy. It had some awesome wording. Powerful imagery. The flow was really good. I just wish that you maybe had left a description on this or use more clarity in the poem. Overall, excellent.

    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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