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    dots Submission Name: When I Sit Alonedots
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    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhen I Sit Alonedots
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    When I sit alone I talk to him.
    My path, my guide, my closest kin.
    His presence a lightning storm of pain.
    My rudders in this ocean of change.

    When I sit alone I listen to him.
    To the endless talk of blabbering confusion;
    And piece together my pearls of wisdom,
    Pearl periods that end sentences of existence.

    When I sit alone Iím all I need to be,
    To be contemplating Ďto be or not to be.í
    Itís my being thatís being in question here.
    I am that I am, so what is it I fear?

    When I sit alone he shows me Iím small.
    Another grain of sand on the ocean floor.
    My dreams, my pride, my loves, my goals;
    Just expensive wrapping on an empty soul.

    When I sit alone I touch his reality.
    He, the watcher in this gluttonous fantasy.
    When I sit alone is when I understand him,
    That mysterious God lurking under my skin.




    Submitted on 2006-03-06 12:16:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm...I liked this one though your intent on who you were talking about was vaige it was still good.Reading was slightly rough but read well enough to get through ok.Good work,Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]


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