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    dots Submission Name: My Old Pathdots
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    Author: Flamequill
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77/97/35
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 1087
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 850



    Description:
       Hey, rushed so I can't describe it sucks and I need help so lend me hand

    Paco the Poet of Arson


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    dotsMy Old Pathdots
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    I listen to this music
    and I remember
    all the pain
    amid the crying rain

    All this unhealthy weight
    All this never ending pain
    even while I'm mumled
    I remember how I succumbed

    I remember the tears
    falling on my face
    by the firelight
    and being shaken to fright

    I remember who I was
    and it seems centuries past
    a piece of trash into fire cast

    It seems like I haven't changed
    that always I've been this way
    from my old path I stray
    cuz I know the pain it takes to stay

    In this new place
    while walking on my new path
    I feel so free
    and I wish I would have seen

    All the pain it took to stay
    so from my old path I stray




    Submitted on 2006-03-06 12:25:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, it seems like you are what youve become based on your past experiences, at least that's what i got of it, and like you can do nothing about that; like you will never change. The rhyming was a wee bit forced but it never took away from the brilliance of it all. In finale it turned out very neat.
    | Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked that. For some reason it just seemed familiar to me, or it seems somehow I can relate. I'm not really sure. I was kind of drawn toward it.
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this part
    "and it seems centuries past
    a piece of trash into fire cast"
    Im sorry about what your dad did to you..
    :(
    Amber
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]


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