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My Old Path

Author: Flamequill
ASL Info:    17/Male/Sparta Michigan
Elite Ratio:    3.42 - 77 /97 /35
Words: 135
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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Average Vote:    4.0000
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Hey, rushed so I can't describe it sucks and I need help so lend me hand

Paco the Poet of Arson

My Old Path

I listen to this music
and I remember
all the pain
amid the crying rain

All this unhealthy weight
All this never ending pain
even while I'm mumled
I remember how I succumbed

I remember the tears
falling on my face
by the firelight
and being shaken to fright

I remember who I was
and it seems centuries past
a piece of trash into fire cast

It seems like I haven't changed
that always I've been this way
from my old path I stray
cuz I know the pain it takes to stay

In this new place
while walking on my new path
I feel so free
and I wish I would have seen

All the pain it took to stay
so from my old path I stray

Submitted on 2006-03-06 12:25:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow, it seems like you are what youve become based on your past experiences, at least that's what i got of it, and like you can do nothing about that; like you will never change. The rhyming was a wee bit forced but it never took away from the brilliance of it all. In finale it turned out very neat.
| Posted on 2006-04-27 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked that. For some reason it just seemed familiar to me, or it seems somehow I can relate. I'm not really sure. I was kind of drawn toward it.
| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this part
"and it seems centuries past
a piece of trash into fire cast"
Im sorry about what your dad did to you..
| Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]

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