my two faced prince by lost.within.you

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Submission Name: my two faced prince dots

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Author:	lost.within.you
Elite Ratio:	3.12 - 31/21/4
Words:	114

Class/Type:	Poetry/Angry
Total Views:	166
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i was kind of mad at someone so i just started to write...

my two faced prince dots

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oh look how you shine upon your throne of lies
The crown of despair you wear only hides
the truth of the matter
that you rule a world that you created
One lost within the confines of your mind
Where the light in your eyes has faded
Once again you seem to never loose
your composure of a cold and hidden soul
I ask of you do you really enjoy the crown you wear?
Look at your palace of glass that you have bulit
Do you think that it can really withstand time?
Oh how I see you shine upon your throne of lies....

Submitted on 2006-03-06 16:46:49 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I feel this poem ,and I know what you mean. I can't count how many two-faced princes, queens, and kings I've met. Its a deep look into your interpertation of the twisted two-facedness...is that a word? Anyway, it was clearly put and understandable.

LoVEiT!

Singlerose:)
| Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm...interesting...not horrible...and I agree...that last line kicked some major arse when it comes to hard hitting semi-conclusive ending...thankies for posting
| Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by reveries | [ Reply to This ]
  Actually I thought this very good for such a short piece,and interesting way to tackle someone who is two faced,I liked the eighth line about the palace of glass keep writting kid
adnil
| Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! i love all the symbolism and metaphors throughout. this poem was so powerful and awesome. i loved it. favoriting. short but effective. i like your comparison of him as a liar to a prince. i dont really think that its organized looking enought for my taste, but its definitely good.
| Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by secretsuperstar | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! i love all the symbolism and metaphors throughout. this poem was so powerful and awesome. i loved it. favoriting. short but effective. i like your comparison of him as a liar to a prince. i dont really think that its organized looking enought for my taste, but its definitely good.
| Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by secretsuperstar | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, I love that last line! Holy cow...for some reason that line is just really really awesome...I would love the poem almost solely for that. Thank you for the comment and kudos to your writings.
| Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by suneideises | [ Reply to This ]
  ok this is freaking me out! i have a poem practicly exacly the same except about a king! wat de hell is goin on?! i dont remember it ill try and find it l8ter on...great poem! :) elva
ps: i used the - throne of lies sentence in mine 2 !
pps: sorry 4 de crapy comment :(
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by elva | [ Reply to This ]
  Good Morning, This is a VERY creative work of free verse! I wish I had just half of your creativity. You are always SO original in the themes of your work. I also love your quote: life is more beautiful lost within your smile" by me" located here on your main page. You have a true talent of expressing yourself. The only thing I can think of, to make this piece a more beautiful read is, you might want to cut down the number of words on the two longest lines to make them better fit with the length and cadence of the other lines. I only offer this as my humble opinion to try to maybe help you hone your skills as a poet. I mean no disrespect in any way. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece with me. I deeply appreciate your comments on my poetry and I would value any sugestions you have (on any of my work) to help me be a better poet. Until the next time, TK
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by lookhomeward | [ Reply to This ]

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