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    dots Submission Name: Sad Submissive (Dirty Laundry)dots
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    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 789
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    Description:
       I hate feet....that's important to know....I hate hate hate them.....but this poem simply displays what's important to this sad submissive.....what's hers.....HER dirty laundry


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    dotsSad Submissive (Dirty Laundry)dots
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    I kiss his feet
    because I know he likes it
    I wash them
    though it makes my eyes wet
    I massage them because
    he says it's what...
    good girls do
    Disgusted
    I slug off to His room at night
    with perfect walls
    floor
    clothes
    and bed...
    all inside of His perfect house
    with perfect neighbors too
    I wash my hands and
    dry them on His perfectly folded towels
    and sit in a basket of my dirty laundry




    Submitted on 2006-03-06 17:27:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the story behind this piece, it flows nicely, clear and to the point. I like this, but I really don't have much to say about it, Its well put and it shows good usage of verbs...something many people offen neglect.

    Keep up the great work!



    Singlerose:)
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]


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