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    dots Submission Name: Discovery Channel(taught us..)dots
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    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       yeah.....it's about sex...but I'm frustrated so bare with me please :-P


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    dotsDiscovery Channel(taught us..)dots
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    ~Discovery Channel (taught us how....)

    I sleep next to him every night
    we kiss
    we cuddle
    we f**k as if we know nothing more then
    Discovery Channel urges
    discovering nothing more than sweat in new places
    channelling all energy into rythmic beating
    heart- breath
    breaking
    tearing as we rub flesh hard
    capturing this
    fresh scent while young-




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      raw and brutal but still very passionate. i liked it a lot. it was too the point but i think that added to the bluntness of it that was the best part for me.
    | Posted on 2006-03-06 00:00:00 | by secretsuperstar | [ Reply to This ]


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