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Never Leave You


Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 82
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This is a poem I wrote for Mylo...He's moving soon..So I decided to express myself through poetry like I always do :):P Hope you like it


Never Leave You



Your leaving me soon
And I have to admit
Tears will fill my eyes
My heart will break
But this I know is not a mistake
I'll love you no matter where you go
This love for you is so true
And everything we feel is so real
So before you leave
Wipe those eyes
Put on that smile I adore
Keep your head high
Because baby I love you
No matter how far you are
I will never leave you




Submitted on 2006-03-06 20:53:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Again with the shortness you get your emotions across in your poems and i knwo that's your main part of writing them but you can get so much more across by adding more to the poems you I know there is so much more you'd like to tell him about his leaving and I know you have the abilty to write about that you just need ot keep doign it. If you think you can't add nymore to a poem that's when you stop writing it and end it keep writing lady and I'll keep reading

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| Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]


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