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    dots Submission Name: Never Leave Youdots

    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is a poem I wrote for Mylo...He's moving soon..So I decided to express myself through poetry like I always do :):P Hope you like it

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    dotsNever Leave Youdots

    Your leaving me soon
    And I have to admit
    Tears will fill my eyes
    My heart will break
    But this I know is not a mistake
    I'll love you no matter where you go
    This love for you is so true
    And everything we feel is so real
    So before you leave
    Wipe those eyes
    Put on that smile I adore
    Keep your head high
    Because baby I love you
    No matter how far you are
    I will never leave you

    Submitted on 2006-03-06 20:53:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Again with the shortness you get your emotions across in your poems and i knwo that's your main part of writing them but you can get so much more across by adding more to the poems you I know there is so much more you'd like to tell him about his leaving and I know you have the abilty to write about that you just need ot keep doign it. If you think you can't add nymore to a poem that's when you stop writing it and end it keep writing lady and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]

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