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Don't wit me

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 56
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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sumone mess with me little sis and her mates i was not a happy camper since this person JUST walked into the room.......

Don't wit me

Oi bitch
Come ova here
Look me in tha face
Ain’t so tough now are we
Stupid skank
Dis my girls
Go round talkn crap
Sayin this and that
Try and stare me down bitch
You’ll get beat to the ground
That’s right
Only good when you’re the one
Doing the scaring
Isn’t it now?

Submitted on 2006-03-07 03:34:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow.this poem is one of those that stands out from the rest espectially the title dont fu*k wit me......i say its great
| Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by MysteriousPoet | [ Reply to This ]
  i think it has many typos and well.. i like the idea. but i think you should add more metaphorical stuff.. here.. nice write and thanks for sharing...
peace and love
take care!
| Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
  i think this was a very good angry poem. I really liked it, cause it shows how much you'd stand up for your sister.

Only good when you’re the one
Doing the scaring
Isn’t it now?

I liked that last one, because most of the time it really means something.

| Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
  w000000000t u shut that mutha [censored]er down! holler danm sassy i mean that like just plain owned lol ... i like that line about try and stair me down its like awsome

| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]

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