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    dots Submission Name: Bring me alivedots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This is a questionable weird thought i had for in reality i am dead person walking alive and well.

    searching for maya(a dream of a woman so beautiful that it cannot be true) in my life endlessly so that she can bring me alive.

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    dotsBring me alivedots

    Dead am I in this world to be alive?
    With a life without purpose in search for life.
    Shall a dream come true in a dream to be real?
    Standing here I think endless thoughts under the dice.

    A top spins as such with a point to find,
    Does the world spin as such with the wind to blow?
    Walk up every time with the hope of a day,
    Nights to fall in the end of the flow.

    Wild does a cat see with the honey comb of nothing?
    Make thy self in water burning in vain of bloods.
    Shall I not be free in this world of dreams?
    Bring me alive I ask with dreams in buds.

    Love me once my dream my love,
    For the day that I wakeup in the stars.
    My life my soul free at last,
    With your touch shall end my life in bars.

    Cry do I as such in this hive so closed,
    Bring me alive I ask with this curse to end.
    Waiting for you Maya shall I be forever,
    Bring me alive I ask the boon to be found.

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