Description: This is just an idea that came to me. If you think i did a terrible job, please tell me so. If not, still tell me so.
You know I love you -------------------------------------------
You know i love you
The person who
has always been there
the person who said
she loves me.
You know i could
never hate you.
You have always
been there for me
if its standing in the cold
watching me become
and all american
in cross-country
or on stage
doing my performance.
You know i love you
you are my mother
my hope
my joy
my life.
Well you said to tell you you did a terrible job, irregardless as to what my opinions are; so you did a terrible job. What must it be to have a mother who loves you, and is there for you earnings your love and respect in return. good for you. However the fromat you choose for this piece doesn't really seem to work all that well. Also with your wording'phrasing it reads kinda like an offset diary entry, I don't know if that was your intention, but if not now you know. It's worth working on though.
That is a well-written one... I just liked because it is really nice admit that you love someone and let him know that as I stayed loving a girl for more than three years but silently without telling her and as a result I've lost her for ever but now I've someone that loves me and I do so...lol... My favourite part is this: " You know i love you you are my mother my hope my joy my life. " That is really nice to describe the one you really love with your mother, you hope in life, your joy and your whole life as do my faincee this is everything for me. Great Job.
Wow, this poem was nice. You didnt do a bad job on this poem, free verse my favorite. I loved how u wrote a poem about your mom. She seems lyke she is very important to u. Um... I have loved this guy for about 2yrs. And we went out for half of last yr and hlaf this yr. Now we are broken up. I still love him but my friends like him and I dont know how to tell him my feelings or w.e but they flirt w. him ALOT and that pisses me off and one asked him out! And he said he would respond later. I know this has no effect on you but Im tyring to say is that you confessed your love to ur mother and is not afaid to show it. Maybe I should try it w. my love. This poem is going into my favorite's list. I really loved ur poem and cant wait to read more poems of urs. My favorite part was THE WHOLE POEM! Great Job and cant wait to read new poems. Ur my inspriration w. this poem. Thank-you very much.
Submission Name: You know I love you
