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    dots Submission Name: Leather Jacketdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 767
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    Bytes: 382



    Description:
       the girl leaves her jacket as an icscuse to come back to see him later...he thinks it's cute.


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    dotsLeather Jacketdots
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    hanging from his coat rack
    (that his mother isisted he have)
    was her jacket
    made for winter days
    she wore it when it was cold outside
    it was going to be about thirty out there today(so says his mother when she called this morning)
    he imagined her shivering out on the street,just to assure herself
    that she would be with him tonight




    Submitted on 2006-03-07 11:03:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, I love it. Scary, it almost sounds like something I'd do. Actually, have I done something like this before? Really, who hasn't?

    he imagined her shivering out on the street,just to assure herself
    that she would be with him tonight

    definitely my favorite part
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely...I've really enjoyed reading your work thus far...this poem left me in a very warm place (as I wait for the guy I adore to return home)...it's perfect...absolutely perfect...my favourite lines are the last two...thankies for sharing
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by reveries | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really creative write
    You took an object the leather jacket and created a little mysterious world for it
    That was really clever
    I liked this one
    Great Write
    God Bless
    Ron

    By the way my poem
    Liquified Dreams is not about Alcoholic Beer
    Birch Beer is the same thing as root beer it just has a little more bite
    I tried to explain it in the description but evreyone thinks it is about alcoholic beer
    That really makes me laugh thou
    I do not drink alcohol at all
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      this was relly cute and unique
    i liked the idea you spun into it
    the last couple of lines are prbly my fav
    keep up the work
    <3ash
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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