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    dots Submission Name: The Remorse Lovedots
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    Author: YoungPoet90
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 5/7/4
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Depression at its most...


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    dotsThe Remorse Lovedots
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    The gloomy sorrow
    Within my petit heart
    When she stabbed hard

    She threw me left
    With her lips
    Like blows on my ribs

    I lie there breathless
    Waiting for another blow
    Defenseless and desperate

    She always utters good bye
    When I want her in the moments
    How powerless can love be?

    I rather shatter metal
    With my knuckles
    Instead of your lips

    I rather stare at the sun
    When it eclipses
    Instead of your sexy glare

    I rather hold my breathe
    And choke myself to death
    Instead of living life

    Tears speak more than words
    But your body language interrupts
    Leaving me defenseless

    You woke up one morning
    Rubbing on the other side of the bed
    Feeling emptiness without me

    Only a small letter to remember
    With five depressing words
    “I used to love she”




    Submitted on 2006-03-07 11:41:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      over all I really liked what you were trying to say in this write but then I came to the bottom and the last line just didn't tie everything together... but maybe its just me having an off day.. =].. who knows.. welcome to elite skills hope you like it .. I know I do .. have a great one
    Peace
    penny
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]



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