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    dots Submission Name: Slate Defensedots
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    Author: Vagrant_AI
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Arizona, USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 9/13/23
    Words: 398
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 149
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2468



    Description:
       Writer's insanity breaks through


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    dotsSlate Defensedots
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    Keep grip on your gun before you still your hand
    Aim with a wishful heart and steady your legs, now stand and
    Keep silent in the secrets she hasn’t kept from you
    In motion absent few from what you cannot do
    Well, you just now did,
    Would love bring to kill?
    Did her eyes wish you well?
    Writer, they dilate
    Did you hate her so?
    Erase her character

    Minus god sent
    In the way she left my house back there
    You will miss me, well I found you
    Killed in pretend
    Brought in life and out on and through
    Found you dead in fake instead

    I named you distinct
    And had you play the part you could’ve had
    If you were here
    With me sleep sound
    As the ink covers you around

    Bury her in the rightful way and indiscriminate curtain call
    I think you couldn’t have missed your cue
    If you went somewhere else, even chance him with you, now die
    Will she be replaced with someone new?
    Would she catch him as he suffocates and lets her through?
    Writer, I cry clean slate
    Did you hate her so?
    Erase her character

    Minus god sent
    In the way she left my house back there
    You will miss me, well I found you
    Killed in pretend
    Brought in life and out on and through
    Found you dead in fake instead

    I named you distinct
    And had you play the part you could’ve had
    If you were here
    With me sleep sound
    As the ink covers you around

    I love you now as she’s bleeding
    Dear, my Jessica, your touch brings my jury
    And they sing it out loud for your replacement
    Attached before the screw reversed
    With the hammer that brought the nail down on my heart
    Keep silent in the breath that you take from me
    Blackened love
    I want you anyway
    Visions stream in my blood
    And poison my blood
    Captured by erased
    Character

    Minus god sent
    In the way she left my house back there
    You will miss me, well I found you
    Killed in pretend
    Brought in life and out on and through
    Found you dead in fake instead

    I named you distinct
    And had you play the part you could’ve had
    If you were here
    With me sleep sound
    As the ink covers you around




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    ||| Comments |||
      well guy. this thing you wrote didn't turn to well... unfortunatly :(
    i hate being the bearer of bad news. and i'm really trying to say this in a nice way (not that you care).. but maybe you should focuse on reading quality poetry to get an idea of what it is. or just type "how to write quality poetry" in the google search.
    also, it would help you to spend more time commenting than posting, for now anyway. later.
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by vohomegirl | [ Reply to This ]



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