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Submission Name: MELT dots

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Author:	TechnoticQ
ASL Info:	25/M/Royal Oak, MI
Elite Ratio:	3.86 - 359/307/43
Words:	170

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	263
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	725

Description:
Something simple I wrote in class today.

MELT

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M ay I love you
May I make
Myself your first face when you wake
My love, my life, my pretty thing
Missing you is maddening.

E very whisper
Every action
Earns another small contraction
Excites every single nerve within
Echoes in waves under my skin.

L et me sonnet
Let me caress
Let me love your loveliness
Let me hold you soft and warm
Let me keep you safe from harm.

T ry me out
Try to see
This love coming out from inside me
Through my words and what I do
To put what’s in me into you.

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  nifty piece. mmmmeeeelllltttt. into a puddle at my feeet.
even for a love poem it pretty much rocked
| Posted on 2007-03-19 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  that was amazing! each line delivered such beautiful emotion, it takes a lot of talent to make your readers feel what u feel and u did that so well. i love your choice of words, you're so intellectual. i cant think of anything remotely bad to type.
Emily..
xx
| Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by FunkyMonk | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem is wonderful. Insightful, beautiful. The words ar so exciting... please please keep writing, your poetry amazes me

Samantha
| Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by Sharati_hottie | [ Reply to This ]
  this took true talent and time to have each line start with the same letter and still have rhyme scheme...i however don't like the space in the first line of the new stanza...
| Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was yet another outstanding write by one of the best poets on this site. Good job man. Under normal situations, I would loose a stream of florid prose to praise your talents, but i'm really tired right now, so let it just suffice to say that that is incredibly talented and original. Excellent work. Keep writing.
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by thor_s avatar | [ Reply to This ]

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