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    dots Submission Name: The Misfitdots

    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       haven't posted in awhile. Might i add "misfit" in this case is more so a state of being, not necesarily an object.

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    dotsThe Misfitdots

    You are the rain
    On a summer day
    Not grinning with light
    Only falling from an angelís cheeks
    Rapping at your roof

    You are the cold winter draft
    Dancing on my face
    I kill you with a scarf
    You are muffled with my warmth

    You are the dogs bark
    Coming from such a loved friend
    Yet hated
    Your beatings have not chased me away
    Iím still there
    Without this canineís dignity

    I am the widowís pain
    Her suffering
    Of a loss
    Something is missing
    Something is gone
    Something is lost

    You are the outcast
    The loner
    The castaway
    You are the misfit

    Submitted on 2004-05-03 15:59:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yesss...i was that way, a beautiful exterior governed by my darker side, intruding like ' a cold winter draft'...well captured and metaphorically poyniant...
    thanks for the commment on my lyrics, i am not sure what u meant by jumbled...but then again i am no xpert, just a man who can rhyme
    keep cool
    | Posted on 2004-07-15 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]
      This is deep and everything, and I really like it. It's got a lot of message behind it. Great job.
    | Posted on 2004-05-03 00:00:00 | by Dark Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a sweet comfortable poem, the 1st stanza was wonderful and i liked the "I kill you with a scarf" line, i thought it was unique. nice job .
    | Posted on 2004-05-03 00:00:00 | by Exodus Night Sky | [ Reply to This ]
      not bad, not bad at all. i like the way this has such unique oppositions... it makes it really interesting. the last stanza seems to make this very complete. nice piece you have here.
    | Posted on 2004-05-03 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]

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