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    dots Submission Name: Last Moments of Life (pt. 2)dots
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    Author: chaos_flame
    ASL Info:    24/m/ky
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 46/79/25
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 187
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    dotsLast Moments of Life (pt. 2)dots
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    Amy wakes up dazed and her head is pounding. She reaches to grab the back of her head and realizes her arms and legs are tied down. Blood starts to run down her neck. She remembers being in the parking lot and a sharp pain. Now, she is here. The room is dark. Then a light turns on revealing a note on the wall on the side of her....

    People dont know the meaning of love
    they put their petty wants above
    they love to cause their lovers pain
    and tell them their to blame

    Most relationships are just fake
    and one always pays for the other's mistake
    this is not the way love suppose to be
    and now its time for you to see

    You treat your lover like shit
    to get your way you throw a fit
    you go fuck every guy you can find
    and just keep fucking with his mind

    you have broke his heart
    and tore his soul apart
    we time for you to meet your end
    time for you to feel his pain my friend

    Another light appears in front of her. A dark figure holding something. It looks like a bow. She hear sadistic laughing and hears the bow snap. An arrow hits her and goes right through her heart. She is still alive long enough to shed a single tear, then she dies. These were amy's last moments of life......






    Submitted on 2006-03-07 17:05:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      haha. Well, I guess since I know more of your background, I can pretty much guess who was the inspiration here. No more needs to be told. Leaving the reader in a bit of a haze is always a good thing. Again, spelling needs work, but thats it :D

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    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]
      I would suggest that you make a more descriptive short story out of this piece. I feel that this is just a little sample of what the reader really wants, give us some back story as well.
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]



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