Description: Eh just another little something something that popped into my head.
Power of Ages -------------------------------------------
Silence one
Silence all
Court is now in session
This young one here
Wishes to challenge my position
Yes I have come to challenge your spot
To rule as you do requires power
I say this you have not
So you must step down old one
Speak to us young man
Tell us your power great
That we may listen
And thus debate
Hear me now old ones
For I have much strength and skill
None will disobey me
Or their blood I will spill
If you were upon my chair child
Tell me this
How would you eat?
If you have no farm or stream to fish?
That is easy old man
I will eat the same as you
The villagers will farm and fish
Giving me a share as is my due!
So you would not do as I do?
Spend a week as each farmers hand?
Thus learning his troubles
As well as earning the food you demand?
I have no need to dirty my hands
For I am of higher caste than thee
I wear silks as you wear wool
The people will give because they love me
There is a difference between fear and love
You see it not, sure as I live
Tell me great one
What would you do if they do not give?
Those who do not give
I will certainly slay
For I am powerful
And in their place they must stay
Enough young one!
You are powerful indeed
Of high caste, true
But no more powerful than me
There is something you don't understand
'Tis better to rule with love than sword
You may be able to kill one man
But all of them would kill themselves on my word
Your muscles mean not to us
You may wear silk to my wool
But surely you don't see
You needed no help to prove yourself a fool
You have a sharp sword and will to use
Yet I am a man that can put mine down
If you did the same, surely you would die
So I ask who has the power now?
You or I?
Hi This is another write of yours I like I must admit I really like your style of writing I think of it almost as a teacher giving advice To those who wish to listen In this write it shows you need to be friendly andf helpful to achieve true happinesss God Bless Ron And I am truly humbled by your comments I really am happy you enjoy my work I will be looking for more writes from you Ron
lol. The condescending voice in this is quite hilarious. I do think a different font (or even italics) could help seperate between one perspective to the next. I also sense a bit of ridicule in this (between the old and young) or is it a battle of self? Overall this is good.
An interesting style. I think this conversation would be helped if the font style were different for the two parts, or had different para. indents. It would contrast the parts better. As for the poetry, I think it suffices, but seems not as inspired as the ideas. Nevertheless, it flows fairly naturally, though some of the near-rhymes present a few points of strain. Overall, I found this interesting and unique. I shall have to look at some of your other pieces. fred
Submission Name: Power of Ages
