Description: Lets just leave it at that my friends haven't really been around a lot lately. And some people who I thought were my friends really aren't.
I also want to thank Lost Sheep for the line break suggestion. I think it really helps out a lot...Thanks man...
As far as the piece goes, I was a bit distracted by the first line as I've listened to too much Garth Brooks. He, of course, has a song that starts with those same words and I'm afraid "Where the whiskey drowns and the beer chases" jumped right into my brain.
Other than that, I found myself trying to link the wrong pieces together, Maybe you'll want to add a few line breaks to force the reader to your structure. Maybe:
I got friends In low places
So low that they Don't even exist
Can't depend on them
Nowhere to be seen At the first sight of trouble
I wouldn't trade them For the world
I can count on them To not be around When I need them the most
If you think this is how all your friends are like than i feel sorry for you, im not so shure how to put this, ummm i guess if they have been like this forever than there really arn't your friends. As well you should really think about the person who you concider your friend and look back to see what they have done to get a title like that. For you se i'm at a point in my life where tons of my so called friends are starting to not be so good to me so im kinda going throug the same thing. I haven't been able to get on the net for a while because my brother is usually asleep or using the comp. The only time i get to go on the comp is at school so u wont hear much from me. This is pritty good not your best i think it could use some more work but its not to bad. It has a them that tons of people can relate to so i think it has a good edge to it. I think i have said enough now well i will try and talk to you soon. byes.
Submission Name: Accountability
