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    dots Submission Name: Forget We Metdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsForget We Metdots
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    Out of kindness and respect
    I request we allow
    this love to die before
    it has a chance to begin.

    Please pretend that glance
    wasn't a tad too long.
    We should be senile about
    the shine in your eyes
    and the smile too wide.
    The joke was funny.
    That is the only reason
    I laughed

    We should start by being
    rude and coarse and keep
    a distance between us:
    be far enough away
    that sparks cannot fly.

    Ignore the universe's flow
    that tangled our driftwood souls
    on the riverbank of passion.
    We will end as kindling
    in a campfire of love.

    There is no need to ignite
    a fire that too soon
    will diminish to an old flame
    casting deep shadows of
    dark regrets.

    You should forget we met.
    If I could, I would.




    Submitted on 2006-03-08 07:55:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. this hit hard. a tale of heartbroken and sorrow... amazing. even if it didn't rhyme well. it was a great story told. different, unique, special. good work. =]

    db
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by deathbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, it doesn't rhyme very well , but i LOVE it..its awesome... there are several time i feel this way, wishing i could forget people, places, or things...but i cant there will always be a part of them in my mind... whether the thought be of regret, hate, sorrow, or joy.......we all wish we could forget many things but sometimes we can't..

    truly unique and understandable....nicely done.

    Isabella
    | Posted on 2007-01-26 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      I saw this title on someone else's fave list... I've been feeling lately like I wish I could forget I ever met someone so the title caught my attention... the content has brought me to tears. I feel that... that's about all I can say. You really brought out the heart-wrenching emotion this situation can cause... at least for me anyway. It's on my faves now... thanks for a great read.
    | Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by kiddo13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww...tears Chrys, this is really sad. The last line was so powerful, and I think it wrapped up the poem about how in love the person was with the other person. It's just so sad that they have to try to live apart and pretend not to love each other, and I think it's just so sad. I think they should of at least tried, but the poem was so amazing, Chrys. I feel so sad for the them. Hard stuff. Anyways, great write.
    Peace, love, and a moment in euphoria,
    Aya
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      This is just perfect for how im feeling right now unfortunately...i dont have any suggestions because i love it just as it is...im adding this to favs...well done chrystine this is a great piece!
    | Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed this peice. I felt every word jump out at me. I enjoyed the way that you choose your words. its like to every loser ive met i wanted to say "forget we met" but you beat me to it and i think that you did a fantastic job.
    kandi
    | Posted on 2006-04-10 00:00:00 | by kandi | [ Reply to This ]
      I see this as someone afraid to get hurt too often, too much.
    So she decides to play it safe, to deny the chemistry between her and this man.

    She is afraid to get burned like a moth too close to the fire. So she keeps her distance.

    Somehow this is about loneliness too. I dunno how, but this seems like a lonely person talking and she rather stay tucked in her well known loneliness, rather than get into a love she doesn't know, and that might lead her to unknown places.

    So she imagines she knows the end to the story, and gives up.
    Yet she is not safe from the hurt. The last line shows regret and a bit od despair.

    If I could, I would.

    It like she chose the smaller of 2 evils.
    Love is hope, and what is life without hope. It is something we too often forget.

    Very well written
    Viviane
    | Posted on 2006-03-23 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]
      What this says to me is that your wish is for real love and not the bogus ones that can lure us. When all is said and done, lust brings a rush into love's urgency and doesn't always wait for the real stuff to grow in the garden

    And let's face it, lust is legal now, has been for quite some time. So we have to face the notion that time is needed to make love grow and treat very kindly the beauty that happens as we discover. Do I sound like a crone giving advice? I'm not, you gave it to yourself, I'm just reflecting.

    Ignore the universe's flow
    that tangled our driftwood souls
    on the riverbank of passion.
    We will end as kindling
    in a campfire of love.

    funny but true, nice job, and I don't think you have to forget this lady, mmmm my crystal ball says...

    Nan
    | Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a very good poem. Very heartfelt and sad yet the reasoning here stands on its own. The fear of falling for someone is a real issue once you have been there and been hurt before. Love just doesnt seem worth the risk that is involved. Sometimes I wonder how wonderful love would be if the fear of it didnt somehow get in the way. A very natural feeling is the fear, as we try to protect ourselves from pain whenever we can. But to love like you've never been hurt, it must really be awesome. Unfortunately, I think we have all been really hurt at one time or another and it tends to stay with us for a lifetime. Regardless of how we may deny its overall impact, it still affects our lives and gets in the way. This poem really explains that feeling so very well. The negative view that love will fail as it has in the past. Very well written and expressed. I could really relate to this one. Love is wonderful but once you have been hurt by it, somehow it seems different and not always a good thing. Very good poem. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      If you only knew how many times I thought this when I met a guy! lol. I even thought it with my current bf, lucky him I chose to forget I was just hurt by another not long past, and fall in wholeheartedly in love. This had a bit of hrut, regret, and fear wrapped up in this one. I was able to see how the female downplayed all the positive with this guy in order not to stay detached from him and love. She is sabotaging herself of happiness. In order not to feel apin again. Thiswas a incrediable write Chrystine! I loved the way you manage to keep her aloof to the last line and she cracks the truth on her real feelings. I think of Tina Turner's song What's Love Got To Do With It? This is a dead ringer of that song. Bravo *tosses roses at your feet.*

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      You should forget we met,
    if I could I would,
    how so true that is,it is not always easy to forget someone rather they be friends ,loves or what not, I like this write Chrystine,it was well put and the image was great in it ,it also let the reader feel what that person was feeling
    good job hope to see more of your poems
    adnil
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      would that we could forget, eh? not so easy to do.. these were my favorites lines:

    Ignore the universe's flow
    that tangled our driftwood souls
    on the riverbank of passion.
    We will end as kindling
    in a campfire of love.

    There is no need to ignite
    a fire that too soon
    will diminish to an old flame
    casting deep shadows of
    dark regrets.

    You should forget we met.
    If I could, I would.

    it is those regrets that eat a person from the inside out. .. it is hard to be cynical about love, but there are times i wish someone would shoot Cupid with his own arrow!!

    well done, Chrystine.

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Heh, heh, heh...bravo Chrystine! Out of sight, out of mind. The longer it is out of sight, the more it turns into just another one of lifes cruel jokes that makes ya laugh.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Well...I think that in this one I can definitely relate. Many I have met and grown that sudden liking to...but then afterwards kind of been like...eh...let it go.

    This was unique. I liked the way that you chose this as a subject. I have never thought of musing off of a person that I met. I usually just try to wipe them clean out of my memory! LOL!

    This was great!

    Much love,

    LI LI
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well put... I do believe that many can relate to this specific piece. I also think I have the last 2 lines in one of my pieces that was written about a year ago when I was in a situation that made me feel exactly the way you wrote...
    I enjoyed the entire piece although my fav. line was:
    be far enough away that sparks cannot fly.
    I've added this piece to my favs. for some of the memories it stirred weren't entirely horrid:)
    ~Tonya
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by Tonya V. | [ Reply to This ]
      Chrystine- I like poems I can relate to- or that stir feeling in me- This one does that for me- some relationships are toxic- and you wish you could forget ever meeting. The fourth stanza was my favorite- but of course you cant ignore the universe's flow- somehow you always wind up washed up on some shore- used for kindling in the "campfire of love" . Very great write- sums up my current state of mind. (adding this to my favs) Take care- Heather
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by delusional | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write.
    I particularly like this part >"Ignore the universe's flow
    that tangled our driftwood souls
    on the riverbank of passion.
    We will end as kindling
    in a campfire of love.< Clever.. it pretty much says what the entire poem is about.

    I don't reallly think the first part is needed, as the rest decsribes so well what your trying to get across.

    Some moments when you feel you have "connected" .. it's hard to let it go at just that.

    Good work! I enjoyed.

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice. I am of this mind myself most times when I meet someone attractive and interesting. I figure what's the point, it'll just end up a fiasco, so why bother! I love the way you said it though and the implied message that you wish it might be different. forget we met. yeah, if it were that easy huh?

    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]


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