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    dots Submission Name: On the Vergedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Well what do you think? I think I may have sobered up.


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    dotsOn the Vergedots
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    I'm on a plane of 'this isn't good for you'
    and no, to be honest I don't care
    because I don't think that it is gonna affect me anyways
    unless it makes me more creative

    sometimes it just takes the stress away you know?
    and I really am thankful for the break
    so this weekend I was planning to go on another vacation
    and I was hoping that maybe you could come along

    because it helps sometimes to think outside the normal box that we restrict ourselves to
    and it helps to really feel something once in a while
    because when I'm on my own it's a different kind of numb
    and when you keep me company I feel colorful
    I really wish we could just paint what I feel please,
    I know it's cold outside but it doesn't matter if it takes all day
    just to see
    if what comes out is beautiful

    I can't follow my thoughts
    what makes you think that you can
    maybe I won't do it again
    maybe I will
    but shit man, this is too expensive to crash with
    and I 'de rather be me anyways




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      Good poem Jaz. I really like the line
    "because it helps sometimes to think outside the normal box that we restrict ourselves to"
    Because I think a lot of people don't let themselves go beyond the boudary that they've set around their lives because they are to insecure, they won't try anything new. Then they down people when they do try something else- which isn't really relevant to this poem. Anyway I really liked this peice.
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
      The lovely poem about cocaine. That is what this is about right? I think that the drug does more damage than you think but that's my opinion. I agree with Martin...I do like that line as well. That is the great thing with all drugs...we can have a different mind...even a different world. It's amazing! But...it does have drastic and damaging effects on reality. Great poem. I can't say I like the flow or the way it was written exactly but I do like some of the wording and the whole point behind the poem.
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Call me restrictive and insecure, but I find that it's not neccessary to get [censored]ed up in order to have fun or try something new. This may make you a little creative every one in a while, but I think in the long run, it's just not worth it. You'll be completely burnt out before you're twenty. I wish you would just be you. You don't need this sh*t, and you know it. I'm sure sometimes it helps you deal, and it's easier than facing it alone, but it's all too easy to just give up on life and sink into a drugged haze. What happened to you wanting to be numb? I don't think that your problem is you can't feel, I think you feel too much, and this is your only way to take the edge off it. I know how we are, we're emotional messes. Don't let it take you somewhere you don't belong.
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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