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    dots Submission Name: Time...dots
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    Author: Kwanying
    ASL Info:    22/F/Denmark
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 23/29/13
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 156
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    dotsTime...dots
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    Once I was happy, but not anymore...
    Some times are good but most times are bad.
    Time passes by so fast...
    Sometimes I feel like Im falling into a deep dark hole without an end.
    Im so tired...
    I wish time would stop ... just for a while.
    I just need a break for a time...
    A place where I can be... and nobody else...
    Where I can stop thinking... dismiss my brain... and join my imagination into a great wonderful world which I have made...
    A world where I am ... happy...
    Yes... ... ... happy.




    Submitted on 2006-03-08 13:14:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey u!! i the wording could be better but its not like a MUST to change it! i like the concept behind it! good job!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i think you have great thoughts for poems but im just not sure in your wording 'and join my imaginations into a great wonderful world which i have made' is a good line but could be great with different wording...maybe my messed up day at work followed me home and im just not feeling the poetry...
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      yea i think u and i share the same problem. i like the message that u are trying to send but the wording and all that jazz isnt that hot. but stay up youngblood
    jhb4
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by jhb4 | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with amanda, but keep up the good writing. but hey im not good with advice. I liked it because it has feeling to it. those are my favorite types of work.

    -bloody-
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by _bloody_kiss_ | [ Reply to This ]



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