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    Author: The_Forsaken1
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 18/25/11
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 158
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    Fuck you! do think that its really time for....
    these games to live and die for.....
    all this that i have strived for....
    dont mean a thing
    mean a thing
    mean a thing
    I cant seem to open my eyes....
    what will death toss at me this time.......
    who's life will be taken.....
    could be you could be me
    you, me
    you, me
    What the hell are we all here for?
    What game are we soposed to play?
    Fuck off with your sick humor.....
    I will never die
    never die
    never die

    When will we see, the darkest dream, to meet the fall, that takes us all.
    when will we need, to live to breath, a life that is,finally free.
    We'll never be,we'll never see,the God that cries , blood tears for me.

    "For man to truly be free, we must understand that in all things we are never free in its fullest form.Then risk our lives to turn tide of the stars."




    Submitted on 2006-03-08 14:09:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is very good. It would probably make a very good song if it was changed a little. Yeah I agree that we will fall some day, and we will never actually be free. We had more freedom when the US first came about (white people anyway) but every day more and more rights get taken away. Nothing we say really matters, the government will do whatever it deems profitable to them. Anyways thanks for the comment on "Stone Puppets".
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
      you portrayed your emotions very well in this, making it a poem i could really get into as i read it. the anger was clearly shown in a really passionate way. good job
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece is extremely deep, the raw emotion put in to it displays clearly your state of mind when written. Great word usage, the format, a little off to me, but it adds to the impact of this piece.

    *keep up the good work*


    Singlerose:)
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very deep. It seem tp me like every word no matter big or small carried some kind of emotion and i truely enjoyed this piece and thanks for shareing
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by Tash | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this a lot. very angry at the world, something we've all felt at one time or another. one thing that i didnt like about it was the fact that you didnt break it up into more stanzas. one long poem can just be hard to read because it's just so long looking. its tiring just seeing the poem. what you have to say is awesome so appeal to our a.d.d. nation and make some stanzas, dawg! overall, very good job.
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by secretsuperstar | [ Reply to This ]



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