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Sometimes


Author: Kaila Turley
ASL Info:    15/F
Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 52 /43 /18
Words: 71
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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yet another one talking about getting over someone


Sometimes



sometimes i want to run to you
i want to tell you everything
but there are times i hide
and tell you nothing

sometimes i think about the past
sometimes its hard letting go
wishing it would last
that your feelings you woudl show

sometimes i still wish
we were as close as we used to be
sometimes i still miss out talks
cant you see?




Submitted on 2006-03-08 17:41:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  nice wrote... i love it... in a way i can relate to it as well.... i feel the same way bout a guy and i just wish things were back to normal...
fgreat write over all... love the flow...

karen
| Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
  This was good I can really relate to it, but I do agree with Amanda up there that it does feel incomplete, and that you could of added more too it and make it deeper in emotion, but this was a good start to what could be an excellent poem you should try to add more too it. Back to more comments kepe writing and I'll keep reading

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| Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]
  I like and can relate to the message but believe that you could add more emotion and detail. It seems like your not really talkin about somethin you actually went through but im nobody so my 2 cents isnt worth much anyway
jhb4
| Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by jhb4 | [ Reply to This ]
  i feel like its incomplete like somethings missing its a good poem flows nice but there just isnt something there that needs to be ...sorry if its disheartening i dont mean it to be i just want more lol
| Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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