Sometimes

Author: Kaila Turley ASL Info:    15/F Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 52 /43 /18 Words: 71

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Sometimes

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sometimes i want to run to you i want to tell you everything but there are times i hide and tell you nothing sometimes i think about the past sometimes its hard letting go wishing it would last that your feelings you woudl show sometimes i still wish we were as close as we used to be sometimes i still miss out talks cant you see?

Submitted on 2006-03-08 17:41:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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nice wrote... i love it... in a way i can relate to it as well.... i feel the same way bout a guy and i just wish things were back to normal... fgreat write over all... love the flow... karen

| Posted on 2006-04-25 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]

This was good I can really relate to it, but I do agree with Amanda up there that it does feel incomplete, and that you could of added more too it and make it deeper in emotion, but this was a good start to what could be an excellent poem you should try to add more too it. Back to more comments kepe writing and I'll keep reading =Logan=

| Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]

I like and can relate to the message but believe that you could add more emotion and detail. It seems like your not really talkin about somethin you actually went through but im nobody so my 2 cents isnt worth much anyway jhb4

| Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by jhb4 | [ Reply to This ]

i feel like its incomplete like somethings missing its a good poem flows nice but there just isnt something there that needs to be ...sorry if its disheartening i dont mean it to be i just want more lol

| Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]

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