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    dots Submission Name: Sixth Story Endingsdots

    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       how i feel put into words. (( sort of old.. )

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    dotsSixth Story Endingsdots

    A thousand more blights in the deserted valley of heart-ache,
    another tale of immense inner pain.
    Discard her and erase her for his own sake.
    More rose pedals line the bullet holes in the wall of shame.
    Mess of death compelled doves spell "mistake"
    For full-hearted love was utterly hopeless.

    Sought out mistrust with so many searchlights.
    Buried with little blood,
    there he lay in a shallow grave with nothing to keep.
    Sept' the lights were searching and halting his sleep.
    Wanted to find, Love ridden bluffs of disappointment.
    Instead, love filled poetry of exquisite atonement.

    Sounds of her melancholy vocals threaten him,
    but closing in on an end.
    Detesting him from the start with imagined solutions.
    The final chapter always finishes without a friend.
    Almost hallowed and ceasing to breathe.

    Sixth story weeping to the top,
    with a building drama bust he'll fall to his death.
    Except in this theatrical display; not one will shed tears.
    Concluding in that shell, little was left.

    Submitted on 2006-03-08 18:55:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First of all, I would shed a tear.
    Ok from this I get the feeling that you are searching for love but keep getting hurt. Yes? And not only that, but you are hurting other people in the process. There's alot going on in this poem, it's hard to keep track of everything. But you always seem to feel things so deeply, and explain them with such strong words and images.
    I haven't commented on a poem in a long, long time. But you know I always like your stuff, keep writing
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by WaxingPoetic | [ Reply to This ]

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