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    dots Submission Name: Burneddots
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    Author: obscureskies
    ASL Info:    19/F/Fredericton NB
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 11/17/15
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    dotsBurneddots
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    And I suddenly feel filthy
    My peachy flesh on display
    Iím standing in the window
    Your name written across my lips
    You have had your way with me

    You had your way with me then
    Your breath hot and heavy on my neck
    Your eyes penetrated the walls I had built
    Steel blue lasers breached the security
    I had taken years to install

    I had lain on your tongue like a snowflake
    I melted in your mouth; slid down your throat
    Did it scare you, having me inside of you?
    Did my presence threaten you?
    I pushed so hard and fell so far

    I craved your knowledge
    I craved your fiery sensation
    Your warmth gave me security
    Not unlike I had felt before
    Your fire was such that it burned

    Wrapped in your arms
    Your weakness emanated in beads of sweat
    Dripping from you silently and unnoticed
    Your lonely heart pounded loudly
    Hoping to someday be heard

    You gave me your world
    And snatched it back so soon
    Alas, I could not keep you
    Never the same shape twice
    I did not know how to treat you

    So now, I feel filthy
    You gaze into my eyes and know
    I sometimes peer through your window
    your name forever engraved in my lips;
    you will have your way with me.






    Submitted on 2006-03-08 20:13:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow... this is reall good. u have a talent. i love the way the poem flowed. It made me feel a pity for the person u talk about. like she is trash or something. I have seen many poems with the same them a this but this is the best do far..well done.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Linley | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...u have the power to put somone in a room with you thru the whole experiance, That is cool, and amazing. Keep it up you really do have a talent.
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by I_m not Broken | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was veryt deep. I liked how you just made this person to be the most dirty person in the world. And how you described everything in great detail. This poem i liked from the beginig to the end. I wll reading so more of you poetry. You did a real good jog and you are very talented.
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Tash | [ Reply to This ]


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