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    dots Submission Name: Fuck me till i bleeddots
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    Author: I_m not Broken
    ASL Info:    17/F/IDK
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 91/98/68
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 15048
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1336



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       I don't know how to describe this one. But, i like it. I stumbled across it while going thru my sketch book...so i decided to post it!


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    dotsFuck me till i bleeddots
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    Lay me down to rest observing the curves
    Rest your tired head beside me, touch my fading skin
    Pull me closer to yourself, begging for my clit
    Kissing my neck, tell me I'm forever yours
    Make me forget these bitches, and whores
    Run your hands down my body
    Brush your lips against my breast, touching to find life
    Fuck till I cry
    Fuck me till i bleed
    Fuck till i Die
    Fuck me cause I'm free
    Touching naked bodies, rubbing naked souls
    Screaming to the gods, begging for control
    Do you see the reason for your touch
    Or is this all just way to much?
    Can you feel me pulling closer to you
    Or are in in denial of the obvious
    Fuck till I cry
    Fuck me till i bleed
    Fuck me till i Die
    Fuck me cause I'm free
    Secluded in our minds, inside an outside world
    Where can we run to espace the formality?
    Rubbing till we're raw, screaming into silence
    Begging for a reason, a reason for this beauty
    The truth is hiding inside our minds
    Behind closed doors can't you see we are blind?
    Blinded by the truth we are searching for
    Fuck me till I cry
    Fuck me till i bleed
    Fuck me till i Die
    Fuck me cause I'm free




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      This made me long to reach out and offer comfort. it seems you have been thrown into the stream of life and can't get out of the pain and agony. You long for a friend, but to what expense? Your blood, your tears, your life? I feel for you.

    ~orange
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      makes me want to do everything in my power to save you. maybe thats odd or weird but its the truth.

    no one should have to deal with such aviodable pain but reality always wins out.

    good write. vivid. keep striving to use your words as a picture.
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]
      theres so much detail that i could picture it in my mind
    | Posted on 2006-12-20 00:00:00 | by pain_is_love | [ Reply to This ]
      My husband would love as do I ... But it makes me kinda ask in the end are you [censored] for the joy .... or to forget.. erase... drown out something or soneone else... And that leeds to are you free or are you trapped in yourself.. altogether it would leave the answer and interpertation to the reader... so I'd have to say well writen and put together..
    | Posted on 2006-09-03 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...that was crazy. When I read it I felt like the poem was wrenching the words off the paper and throwing them at me, daring me to try and ignore them.adding"because Im free", seemed so profound to me.
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by sugargirlplur | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow I loved this poem it was so raw so full of heart felt emotion It shows so much creativity I'm in love with this poem as much as "My angel...My Devil"
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by taintedrose16 | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved it. I love when people just say what they want to say and it seems like you did just that. you didnt hold back and it paid off because this was a great poem. It took me to a different place when i read it and loved it.
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]
      it was so honest and raw. i loved it. ur message was powerful. the passion and desire is shown clearly. it was great hope to read more
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Linley | [ Reply to This ]
      This obviously must be an expression of emotions only. Ain't nobody in their right mind wanting to be loved in such a way. Then again, who knows? Raw and primitive, freedom of expression. Keep writing what you feel.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Mr. Amateur | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write,
    displays such great raw emotion, I love poems like this...I think I need to need this to my favorites! As deep as it is, I can relate in my own way. This was well written, and I like your usage of repetition, some poeple say they don't like it, but this shuts them down!
    *Keep up the great work*


    Singlerose:)
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh.my.god.
    This one made me cry... the repetition of
    "[censored] till I cry
    [censored] me till i bleed
    [censored] till i Die
    [censored] me cause I'm free"
    got me; it burned its message onto my mind. Very powerful.
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by obscureskies | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this, this was nothing short of amazing. The raw passion in it was powerful. reading the title you would think it was just a sex piece but reading it you get the sense that it's much more than that, you are finding peace within self, feeding your soul and creating a haven for yourself where the harshness of the world has no effect on you, sex is just your medium. Good write.

    Congrats,
    Jermaine.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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