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    dots Submission Name: (Revised} Closer Than Friends dots
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    Author: ladyngold
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    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dots(Revised} Closer Than Friends dots
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    My alter-ego is my muse
    one of my human trinities
    we are closer than friends.

    First appreciating what we share
    silently: I shall love him inside,
    where without him I'd be alone.

    I pray and await divine intervention
    where together we finally embrace;
    long-suffering, closer than friends.





    Submitted on 2006-03-08 23:51:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow simply wow.

    i never expected to see such completeness in a poem


    sorry but no bad comments from me
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds like you are speaking of your spiritual realationship with god. I liked the way you wrote this as if you both are intertwined in life as one due the closeness you share. This was very simple in writing, but packed a powerful meaning. I think you did a great job with the flow and expressing your thoughts. Overall, great job.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      There is the 1 relationship that is the true bond of us & "IT" - where the tired & fearful self is just embraced by "IT".
    I'm glad you have this relationship and "IT" will give you strength.
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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