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    dots Submission Name: Released by sunraysdots
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    Author: ladyngold
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 585/520/99
    Words: 9
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
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    dotsReleased by sunraysdots
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    Released by sunrays
    sharp dangerous icicles
    erratically fall




    Submitted on 2006-03-08 23:59:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this haiku
    In this one I like how you refer to the sun as God
    I take this as a clever play on words
    Sun-Son
    I like this

    It is true that if one has invited God into their lives they can destroy any obstacle
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Good combination of the beneficent sun and the dangerous icicles. It's a nice observation on the relationship between good and evil. Kinda like a feeding program giving food away to a murderer without knowing it.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Spare Change | [ Reply to This ]
      Good form and content in this haiku. The message of outcome when things are exposed to light could be directly applied to the human condition as well. This was quite ellucidating!
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      It's always nice to watch the sun melt ice from anything when out and about or simply from a window. This was so simple, yet profound. I think this is something all nature lovers will relate to and enjoy. I certainly did. Great job!

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Really well done haiku goddess - glad to see you back!

    I, too, like the opposing dynamic to this piece - nature is cruel and kind; sometimes at the same time.

    In some weird way Rock, Scissors, Paper came to mind??

    Great & best of luck, joy & love to you in your new endeavors.
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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